sprice: I love the rhythm of these first two lines, the cadence (am I using these words correctly?) but stumble over the indefinite pronoun. It begins to pull me out of the poem, engaging me and making me puzzle over what "it" refers to, and then I realize that I really don't have enough to go on. In the title? No. In the space between the title and the poem? Perhaps, but it's blank. A little later in the poem. Er, maybe, but I can't tell.

cutler: I agree with Scott that these first two lines _sound_ great. I think it has to do with the repeated m's and t's of that first line and the b's and d's of the second. As for the indefinite 'it', maybe I'm just more casual/careless in my reading, but it didn't bother me and on second and third readings it seems clear (to me, anyway) that the 'it' is the speaker's 'dreamday life'.

sprice: hey folks, is there any difference between "whiskey" and "whisky"?

jlewis: Yes. whiskey = American English and whisky = British English. "Whiskey" is an American weirdness; Canadian whiskies are "whisky." Whiskey is, nevertheless, an accepted American spelling (Twain used it, according to the OED), no matter what the Brits think. :)

sprice: What an ending! Just when it seems you're going pretentious, comparing yourself to Neruda, you temper it with an ironic smirk and show that you know his work.