alecia: I love your images here; they're very clear and precise. That said, I'd cut this beginning-line. It places the poem, but doesn't give any key specifics. I don't think the poem needs the winter afternoon placement, particularly, since the rut of the tractor tire is so vivid.

alecia: love the juxtaposition of "methodically" and "exuberantly."

cfanjul: thanks, i like it too ;) i added "exuberantly" later, because i was trying to express the abandon of an animal following it's nature, as refered to in the next line.

m_brophy: I don't agree about the 2 adverbs here -- "he shakes the only way he knows how" has such a tight crispness to be interrupted or qualified by these modifiers which strike me as outside the otherwise clean, spare diction. Or maybe consider moving the adverbs to the end of the action and give them their own line.

cfanjul: [removed a repeated "again"]

alecia: could you somehow show this in an image? i'm thinking perhaps settling into whatever position you want to observe from, breathing, smiling... something like that.

samira: I agree with Alecia, but was wondering if there is a way to show cares easy through physical reaction, such as muscles relaxing, unknotting, something like that.