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cgroom:
Rat, I love this piece. The writing is great; you use short sentences that are deceptively simple really well
to tell the story. I like how it is told almost in the kid's voice, but with the knowledge of you as an adult. The
two moods build together really well in the ending, when you discuss art as craftsmanship, but merely raise
the issue without bashing the poor reader over the head with it. |
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cgroom:
My only suggestion is to expand the part about your design for this piece. Why did Mrs. Buck want more
triangles and a foot -- to make the craftsman ship harder? And what was the process like of making the piece
as drawn; was it hard? Did you like how it may have changed in the implementation, or didn't worry about it
because for you, the idea mattered more? As you can see, I want to get a bit more into your head about the
process of the piece as drawn. |
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cgroom:
This layout work really well. There's a lot of text, but it's easy to digest when put near the drawing and wrapped
around it. I like how the drawing of the jagged triangles fits well with the story of the mean Mrs. Buck and
the value system of craftsmanship over art, because that's shown really well by the drawing. |
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brantley:
Just to wax philosophical, this is an interesting piece to put on a site that's all about criticism of one's work (even though here it's good, nurturing & constructive and done by brilliant people). I think this piece gains a lot of meaning in this particular context... |
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