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[ 1 ] cgroom:
I like how everything is framed with "+" marks, but here you don't connect the lines. Subtle, very cool. |
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[ 2 ] sprice:
There's a funny line underneath her eye... is that bags under her eyes, or something else? It doesn't appear in the other panels, so it confused me. |
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[ 3 ] laura:
re (2): huh? |
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[ 4 ] sprice:
I only just noticed that each of the people provides half of the heart. Nice touch. |
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brantley:
t-shirt! t-shirt! t-shirt! |
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tasha:
*insert shit-eating grin here* |
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david_a:
This is perfect. Balanced, playful, joyful. I love the way the boxes merge at the end. And the wicked eyebrow action. This brightened my day. Oh, and I'd wear that t-shirt. |
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sprice:
Complete agreement on all counts. The layout of this is really light and playful. I like the hearts scattered like pixie-dust in the last panel. |
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cgroom:
Agreement with all of the above! This is a lot of fun! I wonder how it would work on a t-shirt w/in the context of breakfast. Would you need a bigger label, or just make the word "breakfast" a small text scribble on the front of the shirt? |
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mwirth:
Beautiful! I love your free, easy lines (e.g. banana peel in middle panel.) The content, of course, is very cute. This reminds me of Japanese comic books (the good ones) in the kind of panels setting the scene, and how action is described in a more subtle fashion. |
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tasha:
Scott-ya - the "bags" under her eyes might be due to the not-so-sharp quality of the scan, which leads me to...Rat - my "free and easy" lines actually have much erased pencil lurking underneath them ; ] It's funny, scanning tends to smooth out the "imperfections" (and often intentionally so) - like how you can see that the ink bleeds into the paper when you've got it up close an' personal. Asian cultures have turned that into an art, but I am so not zen enough for that ; ]. And, to be honest about the t-shirt idea...I'm flattered, but I don't whole-heartedly agree. Like, I think of t-shirt designs as being image=message - something that requires a second glance can be a good thing, but beyond that it's missed the point. I think there's just a wee bit too much subtlety going on here. Leave intricate stuff to posters and postcards, where it's assumed that you'll spare an extra moment. |
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tasha:
p.s. I'm glad all the manga and anime influence showed up in a good way - in this case, it was subliminal for me (it is often less so ^_^; ) |
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j_moody:
just to add to the chorus-- this is cute (in the most appealing way), and very immediate. good visual language all around. i second the eyebrow and line quality props. |
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samira:
Tasha, while I am not sure I agree with you on the T-shirt comment, I see your point. Therefore:
Postcards! Postcards! |
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tom:
I like this a lot, but I fall on the "no shirt" side of the fence too. I think the best T-shirts are the ones that let you get the gist at a glance from fifteen feet off. This image is complex and full of fine lines, so you have to get close and really read it. At that point, the wearer is wondering why I'm staring so intently at their chest, which is unfortunate and perhaps a little ironic. |
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m_brophy:
Not to drag out Freud, but since no one else mentioned it, the images read not just as playful and erotic, but also kinky, since after all, he is BREAKING an egg, and she is SLICING a phallus. I thought it was a nice touch, to imply s&m in such a seemingly innocent way. |
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tasha:
Well, it _is_ innocent, because I hadn't thought of it that way. What would you say if she had the egg and he had the banana? |
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